Ielts sample essays collection

Comment [A12]: 
Should add “
Overall,
the quality of the hotel has definitely 
improved.”

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
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Example 2
The two pie charts illustrate the rating, which was evaluated by the same 
questionnaires 
completed 
by one hundred guests, on the customer service in 
the 
Parkway Hotel in 2005 and 2010. In general, the feedback from customers became 
more positive 
during 
the five years. 
There were only around one-fifth of interviewees repl
ying
that the customer service 
was good or excellent in 2005 but it soared by almost fifty percent in 2010. Visitors 
who rated the hotel excellent surged by six times between 2005 and 2010. 
Although nearly half of the responders claimed that the hotel was satisfactory in 
2005, it plummeted to less than 20% in 2010. Around two-fifth
s
of the visitors 
claimed 
that 
the services in hotel 
were
either poor or very poor and the numbers 
dropped significantly by half in 2010. The number of guests who thought the hotel 
was very poor decreased 
clearly, 
by 
almost 
four times from 2005 to 2010
from 15% 
to 4%
(153 words) 
Score: 6.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Covers the requirements of the task and presents a clear overview of main trends, 
differences or stages. Clearly presents and highlights key features but could be more 
fully extended.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use.