Ielts sample essays collection

IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
despite there being several similarities, a difference may also be spotted. In Germany 
the USA tourists rose from 1960 to 2010, however the opposite 
occurred
in Australia. 
When analyzing each country individually, we can observe two significant changes of 
tourism in Australia from 1960 to 2010. One of these is the drastic decrease of 
European tourists, which change from 53% in 1960 to only 10% 50 years later. 
Additionally, Asian tourists also changed significantly in Australia starting from 10% 
increasing 
to 53% more in 2010. 
In Germany, such vivid changes 
were
not observed, nevertheless, fluctuations in 
numbers did take place. The most significant one was Britain, changing from only 30% 
to only 6% during the 50 year time interval. 
(188 words)
Score: 7.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. The 
candidate uses some less common lexical items with some awareness of style and 
collocation. There may be some occasional errors in word choice or spelling. 
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