Ielts sample essays collection

Score: 6.0 
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(TA) Task Achievement
Covers the requirements of the task. 
Presents a clear overview of main trends, differences or stages. 
Clearly presents and highlights key features/bullet points but could be more fully 
extended. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression. 
Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences 
may be faulty or mechanical. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
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Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. 
Attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. 
Makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede 
communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. 
Makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce 
communication. 
Example 3
The pie chart compares the percentage of tourists’ nationalities visiting Germany and 
Australia in two different years.
Overall, it is evident that European and British visitors decreased in Both countries 
while Asia
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numbers increased substantially. 
Starting with Asian tourists, they occupied the lowest proportion of visitors with just 
10% in Germany and Australia while Europeans accounted for almost half the 
number of visitors in both countries. However, over a period of 50 years the number 
of Asians flying to Australia increased approximately six fold
,
reaching 63% by the 
year 2010 as well as marking
a
quarter share of visitors in Germany by 2010. 
On the other hand, the percentage of Europeans going to Australia in 2010 was 
where Asians started in 1960 with just one tenth the amount compared to a 
decrease of just 5% of people visiting Germany
,
reaching 40% by 2010. Although 
British visitors flying to Australia decreased slightly over the 50 years, the number of 
tourists plummeted to 6%
,
making it the lowest proportion among all years and 
nationalities.