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(TA) Task Achievement
Generally addresses the topic. Details are mainly mechanical and there isn’t a clear 
overview. Key features are adequately covered but could be done more fully to 
achieve a higher band. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. The 
candidate uses some less common lexical items with some awareness of style and 
collocation. There may be some occasional errors in word choice or spelling. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
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Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. 
Candidate has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors.
Example 2 
The table gives information about how many factories were in England and Wales 
and the number of workers who worked in those factories from both genders over a 
fifty-year period from 1851 to 1901. 
Overall, there was a downward trend of the figure of the male and female employees 
thereby their total number, while the factories number grew in the first four decades , 
dropped through the rest of the period. 
As is given in the chart, the majority of workers were men in 1851 with 287,100 
males whereas the female workers accounted 
for 
190,000 females. As a result, the 
total number was 477
,
100, and in this year England and wales had the lowest 
number of factories. However, this situation changed in 1891 the female employees 
were more interested in working in factories than males with 160
,
000 and 131
,
780 
respectively
,
even though there was an increase in the number of factories. 
Turning to the rest of the period, men exceeded females and a gradual decrease 
could be seen in the number of the employees from both sex. While the females 
figure dropped by 10
,
000 employee
s
from 1871 to 1901 until it reached 30
,
000 
females, males varied between 80
,
000 to 31
,
000 during the same period. Moreover, 
the total number of employees witnessed a remarkable decrease during the given 
period until it made up 61
,
000 employees in 1901. 
Although the number of factories grew to 721 in 1981, this number fell to 600 in 
1901.