Ielts sample essays collection

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Score: 7.5 
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(TA) Task Achievement
Covers all requirements of the task sufficiently.
Presents, highlights and illustrates key features/bullet points clearly and 
appropriately. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout. 
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-
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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
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(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. 
Uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a wide range of structures. 
The majority of sentences are error-free
Makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies. 
Example 5 
The bar chart gives information about the proportion of people who went to the 
cinema from Monday 
to
Sunday in three different years, namely in 2003, 2005 and 
2007. 
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that in these three years the highest 
percentage of people are observed on Saturday and despite minor differences the 
figures for these years follow similar patterns. 
As far as the year 2003 is concerned, the lowest percentage is observed on Monday, 
at 10 percent, and while it fluctuates
at
around 17 percent from Tuesday to Thursday, 
it sharply increases to exactly 30 percent on Friday to reach a high of two-fifths on 
Saturday, before finishing at Saturday’s level at the end of the week 
Turning to 2005, the figures oscillate
s at
around 15 percent between Monday and 
Thursday, before witnessing a climb to roughly one third on Friday to reach a peak of 
45 percent on Saturday. Finally, on Sunday the percentage ends at just below 35 
percent. 
With respect to 2007, the proportion of people going to the cinema experiences 
fluctuations 
of 
around 15 percent at the beginning of the week, surging to one third