Ielts sample essays collection

Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. The 
candidate uses some less common lexical items with some awareness of style and 
collocation. There may be some occasional errors in word choice or spelling.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. 
Candidate has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors.
 
 
 

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Example 4 
The bar graph displays the data of people representing attendance at
cinemas
of 
Europe throughout the week for 2003, 2005 and 2007.
During 2003, only 10% people attended the cinemas on Monday, which doubled on 
Tuesdays with a slight drop on Wednesday (16%). The number of visitors 
significantly increased closer to the end of the week on Friday to about 30% and 
40%
,
respectively. Sundays saw a similar number of people as Friday
;
h
owever, the 
trends did not drastically change during 2005 and 2007. Both the years had similar 
attendance apart from a few noteworthy differences. Wednesdays of 2007 had less 
than 10% attendance, whereas Saturdays of 2005 experienced 45% people at the 
theatres. Although, the number of people remained the same on Fridays for all the 
three years. 
Overall, the number of people increased for all the years from Monday to Saturday 
with a slight decline on Sundays. Many people working on weekdays could be the 
reason of low attendance at the cinemas compared to less people working on 
weekends and more attendance in those days.