Ielts sample essays collection

IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. 
Makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede 
communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. 
Example 2 
The bar graph displays how many people go to the cinemas in an European country 
in percentages on different days. 
The main feature that stands out in this graph is that over the years that this graph 
displays the statistics, 2003, 2005 and 2007, not 
much
variety was found on the 
specific days. There is a maximum difference of only 7 percent on one day found 
between years. But overall the numbers are quite steady over the years. 
Furthermore, if the average of the specific days are compared it can be seen that in 
the weekend there is a significant increase in the percentage of people going to the 
cinema. On Monday to Thursday the percentage is between 10 and 20 percent 
average over the years. Whereas on Friday, Saturday and Sunday the numbers
increased tremendous
ly
to about 30%, 42% and 32% (average over the years) 
respectively.
In conclusion it seems that people went to the cinema mostly on weekends in the 
years 2003, 2005 and 2007
. 
(166 words)
 
Score: 6.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
Deleted: 
many

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate.