Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
slight rise from 2010 to about 9 million and remained stable until 2014. The trend for 
athletics seemingly had the greatest development. 
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2 million 
children in 2008, followed by a sharp rise from 2010 to 5 million by 2012. Swimming 
appears to have been the least popular choice with a small rise to 4 million by 2014 
from 2 million in 2008. 
Overall, the spendings on sport activities had gone up with about 12 pounds per 
month and although football had the highest popularity, athletics had the greatest 
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in participants over this time period. 
(218 words)
Score: 7.0 
 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Covers the requirements of the task and presents a clear overview of main trends, 
differences or stages. Clearly presents and highlights key features but could be 
more fully extended.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. The 
candidate uses some less common lexical items with some awareness of style and 
collocation. There may be some occasional errors in word choice or spelling.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy