Ielts sample essays collection

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(TA) Task Achievement
Covers the requirements of the task and presents a clear overview of main trends, 
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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
differences or stages. Clearly presents and highlights key features but could be 
more fully extended.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use less common 
vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. Makes some errors in spelling and or word 
formation, but they do not impede communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. Makes some errors in grammar 
and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication.
 
Example 3 
The graph 
demonstrates 
the amount of spending
on children's sports by their 
parents from 2008 to 2014 in Britain. The following chart gives information about the 
proportion of children involved in three different sports throughout the same time in 
Britain. 
According to the first chart, it clearly shows a gradual and steady rise from 2008 to 
2014. In 2008 the parents spent about 20 pounds per month on sports for their 
children. The amount increased 
by
about 3-5 pounds on average every second year, 
reaching approximately 32 pounds by 
the 
year 2014. 
When looking at the other graph, it 
had 
without a doubt highest participation in 
football. About 7
.
5 million kids played football in 2008 and the trend experienced a