Ielts sample essays collection

(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Candidate arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall 
progression. Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and between 
sentences may be faulty or mechanical. May not always use referencing clearly or 
appropriately when beginning paragraphs. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use less common 
vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. Makes some errors in spelling and or word 
formation, but they do not impede communication. 
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(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. Makes some errors in grammar 
and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication.
Example 2 
The graphs illustrate 3 different genres of albums purchased by people in Britain 
according to their gender and age group. The 3 types of music were pop, rock and 
classical music.
First of all, from the graphs it was evident that more males purchased musical albums 
than females. Nearly 30% of males bought pop and rock albums and about 10% 
bought classical albums. Whereas for females, only 20% purchased pop and rock 
albums and 7% bought classical albums. Secondly, according to the age groups, 
the 
percentage of customers who bought pop and rock albums were very similar. About 
31% of people between the age of 25-34 purchased pop and rock albums, followed 
by 30% of people between the age of 16-24 and then 25% of people between the 
age of 35-44, finally close to 10% of people above the age of 45 bought pop and 
rock albums.
Lastly, looking at the graph for 
the 
percentage of people who bought classical albums, 
it was noticeable that the fluctuation was far greater than the other 2 graphs. More 
than 20% of the people above the age of 45 purchased classical albums, this was 20 
times more than the people in the youngest age group.
Overall, there were more males than females 
who
purchased pop, rock and classical 
albums. Rock and pop music were generally well-received by the younger age 
groups while classical music was very popular among the older adults.