Ielts sample essays collection

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(TA) Task Achievement
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Excellent start
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There are very few errors 
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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Covers the requirements of the task and presents a clear overview of main trends, 
differences or stages. Clearly presents and highlights key features but could be 
more fully extended.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use less common 
vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. Makes some errors in spelling and or word 
formation, but they do not impede communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. 
Candidate has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few 
errors.
 
Example 3 
The graphs displayed are a collection of three bar graphs illustrating the 
demographics of music album buyers in the genres of Pop, Rock and Classical music 
respectively. The people who purchased the albums are grouped according to their 
gender and age group. 
In all three graphs, there is a higher percentage of males than females in album 
purchases. The difference is more significant in Pop Music and Rock Music 
(approximately 8~10%) whereas the disparity between the percentage of male and 
female customers of Classical Music is only about 2%. In the bar graph showing 
percentage of people who buy Pop Music, the highest groups are of age 16-24 and 

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