Ielts sample essays collection

(193 words)
Score: 5.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Generally addresses the topic. Details are mainly mechanical and there isn’t a clear 
overview. Key features are adequately covered but could be done more fully to 
achieve a higher band. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Information is presented adequately but there is a lack of overall progression and the 
writing is sometimes repetitive. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Vocabulary range is ok but limited and could be improved by using higher level 
academic vocabulary. There are some errors with word choice and spelling. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses some good grammar but a limited range of structures. Too many minor 
mistakes to achieve a higher band. Punctuation may be faulty on occasion and 
occasional difficulty with understanding can be seen. 
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Example 2
The pie charts compare the world expenditure of several categories and show some 
information about the distribution of world population and the consumption of th 
resources. 
It is noticeable that the United States and European countries consumed the majority 
of resources, while there is a large number of population in Asia. Also, food costs are 
the ma
in
part for people all around the world in their spending. 
For world spending, the costs on food accounted for 24% in total expenditure. 
Transport fees are the second ranking 
amount
for people’s spending, which occupied 
18%. However, the money spent on clothing only accounted for 6%, which is just 
about one third of the transport counterpart. 
Furthermore, more than half of the amount of resources (60%) was consumed in 
USA and Europe, but the percentage on their population is only 28% altogether. By 
contrast, the amount of people in Asia is about 4 times larger than their USA and 
Europe corresponding, with 57%.