Ielts sample essays collection

(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses simple and complex grammatical forms, but there are errors. 
Example 2 
The diagram compares and contrasts data on the amount of incident
s
and injured 
cases 
that happened 
per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) while travelling 
by different transportation forms in 2002. 
In general, it can be seen that the demand responsive 
transport
system provided a 
less safe traveling service compared to other forms of transports. 
More specifically, the number of incidents
that
happened on demand responsive 
transport system was slightly over 250 PMT , which was the highest figure of the 
Deleted: 
i
Deleted: 
happened 
Deleted: 
tranport

---

- 47 - 
IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
five and ten times higher than the corresponding figure of the safest transporting 
form,
the commuter train with the figure of 25 PMT. Similarly, the number of people 
injured on demand responsive transport system was also the highest with 
a 
figure 
slightly less than 175 PMT and nearly 7 times higher than the number of 
corresponding cases 
that 
happened on commuter trains.
In addition,
the risk of being injured on heavy trains and light trains were the same 
since 
these 
two forms of transport witnessed almost exact same number of injured 
cases with 75 PMT.
Lastly, it can be described that the likelihood of incidents happened on the light trains 
and busses remained equal as the numbers of incidents recorded on both types of 
transportation were 
precisely
75 PMT.