Ielts sample essays collection

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(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Candidate arranges information and ideas coherently, and there is a clear overall 
progression. Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and between 
sentences may be faulty or mechanical. May not always use referencing clearly or 
appropriately when beginning paragraphs. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use less common 
vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. Makes some errors in spelling and or word 
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formation, but they do not impede communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. Makes some errors in grammar 
and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication.
 
Example 3 
The bar chart presents different means of transport (commuter rail, heavy rail, light 
rail, bus and demand response transportation) according to how many incidents and 
injuries per 100 million PMT in the year 2002. 
Overall, we can see that the bars regarding the number of incidents are consistently 
higher than those concerning injuries for each means of transport, and that demand 
response shows a significantly higher occurrence of both incidents and injuries. All 
types of travel by rail show injuries lower than 50 million PMT. 
When we focus on incidents, it is possible to observe that the numbers are 
always
higher than those shown for injuries. Commuter rail (
approximately
25 million PMT) 
and heavy rail (50M PMT) show the lowest numbers, while light rail and bus 
transportation have the same results, around 75 million PMT. Demand response is 
significantly higher, at more than 250 million PMT. 
If we consider injuries by type of transportation, 
then
the results shift, but only 
slightly. Commuter rail has the lowest incidence of injuries, followed by heavy and 
light rail (around 30 to 40 million PMT), and by bus (20 million PMTs more). Demand 
response shows the highest bar once more, this time at 175 million PMT, which 
represent a significant difference to its bar concerning incidents.