Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
percentage of passenger
s
jump again to about 360 person
s
at 6pm. Although the 
number after 6 start
s
to decreas
e
constantly to nearly 130 passenger
s
at 10pm. 
In conclusion, it is noticeable from the graph 
that 
there are fluctuations in the number 
of passenger
s
who take the train during the day in London. 
(175 words) 
Score: 5.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Generally addresses the topic. Details are mainly mechanical and there isn’t a clear 
overview. Key features are adequately covered but could be done more fully to 
achieve a higher band. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Information is presented adequately but there is a lack of overall progression and the 
writing is sometimes repetitive. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Vocabulary range is ok but limited and could be improved by using higher level 
academic vocabulary. There are some errors with word choice and spelling. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses some good grammar but a limited range of structures. Too many minor 
mistakes to achieve a higher band. Punctuation may be faulty on occasion and 
occasional difficulty with understanding can be seen.