Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
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(TA) Task Achievement
Covers the requirements of the task and presents a clear overview of main trends, 
differences or stages. Clearly presents and highlights key features but could be 
more fully extended. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. The 
candidate uses some less common lexical items with some awareness of style and 
collocation. There may be some occasional errors in word choice or spelling. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. 
Candidate has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors.
 
Example 3 
The graph depicts the percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three 
countries (USA, Sweden, and Japan) in the span of 100 years, from 1940 to 2040. 
Overall, it seems that in 2040 the number of elderly citizens will rise to be much 
higher than in 1940 in all three countries. In the first four decades, the population of 
elders in 
the 
USA increased steadily from just under 10% in 1940 to around 15% in 
1980. Over the next 40 years, the number dipped to below 15% and is expected to 

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