Ielts sample essays collection

 
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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Example 2 
The graph above shows Underground Station numbers in London. According to the 
data, the number of passengers climbs 
to 
400 in a period of two hours. Nonetheless, 
after 8.00 the number of passengers dropped slightly until 10.00, 
whereby, 
at this 
time the numbers remained stable for one hour. 
A prominent feature is that from 11.00 to 14.00 the number of passengers increased 
until 
they 
remained stable for a period of three hours. Nevertheless, at 14.00 the 
number of passengers went down, with the lowest point at 16.00 with 100 
passengers only. 
A significant difference is that passenger numbers 
increased
steadily over 350 from 
16.00 to 18.00. From this time, the numbers started to decline gradually until 
they 
became lower than 
150 passengers at 20.00. From this time, 
there 
was a 
slight
difference of passengers numbers, slightly 
decreasing
from 21.00 to 22.00. 
To summarize, the graph shows two fundamental increments from 6.00 to 8.00 and 
16.00 to 18.00 respectively, with over 350 passengers in both cases. 
(170 words)
 
Score: 6.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Covers the requirements of the task. 
Presents a clear overview of main trends, differences or stages. 
Clearly presents and highlights key features/bullet points but could be more fully 
extended.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression. 
Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences