Ielts sample essays collection

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(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
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(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use less common 
vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. Makes some errors in spelling and or word 
formation, but they do not impede communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. Makes some errors in grammar 
and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication.
 
Example 3 
The line graph illustrates the number of three types of enquiries that a Tourist 
Information Office in a city received monthly from January to June 2011. The modes 
of enquiries included in person, by letter/email and by telephone 
In general, there was an overall increase in 
the 
number 
of
enquiries in June 2011 as 
compared to January 2011. The number of telephone enquiries declined across the 
six-month period, while the quantity of enquiries made in person and by letter/email 
rose.
In January 2011, the least number 
of 
enquiries were made in person. However, this 
figure rose sharply from about 400 to 1900 by June 2011. With regards to telephone 
enquiries, the numbers decreased slightly from January to February 2011. This 
decrease did not 
contribute
significantly to
an
overall increase in numbers for the 
next 5 months. 
In contrast, enquiries by letter/email have showed a declining trend. The decrease 
was negligible during the initial two-month period from January to March 2019 from 
780 to 750. However, there was a sharp fall for the subsequent two months from 
750 to 300 before the numbers started to plateau.