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One of the main causes 
of 
why poverty cannot be solved is corruption since many 
poor countries are not ruled democratically. It is obvious that governments which are 
not controlled efficiently by an elected parliament are prone to misuse development 
aid for their own purposes. Before money 
cascades 
down to develop industry and 
infrastructure, it goes into the pockets of corrupt politicians. Another reason for the 
poor use of development aid is the lack of sound economy policy. If development 
money were used to improve the education system and to create new workplaces, 
people in poor countries would benefit from financial aid. 
Instead of paying financial aid to poor countries, rich countries should help to improve 
the 
infrastructure
by building new streets and railway lines. This policy 
would
help to 
avoid the loss and 
misuse
of development aid. Similar to the Chinese development 
aid policy, all rich countries should be engaged in infrastructure projects to make sure 
that money is used properly. Moreover, companies from rich countries should 
establish joint venture companies with local ones to build up an industrial 
infrastructure. 
In conclusion, I believe financial aid is often misused by recipient countries due to 
corruption and financial mismanagement. Therefore, rich countries should invest 
money 
directly in poor ones by modernizing the infrastructure and establishing joint 
venture companies. 
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Score: 7.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. The response is well developed with 
supported evidence and examples.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some 
under use. Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph.