Ielts sample essays collection

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Score: 6.5 
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(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task. 
Presents a clear position throughout the response. 
Presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-
generalise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout. 
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-
/over-use. 
Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
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Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. 
Attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. 
Makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede 
communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. 
Makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce 
communication. 
Example 2
It is believed that wealthy countries give money to non-developed countries. 
However, it does not solve problems such as poverty. Therefore, developed nations 
should provide other kinds of help to the poor nations rather than economic aid. I 
strongly agree with this statement due to the fact that there are more relevant 
features on society that help to improve the poor countries than financial support. 
First of all, despite the fact that economic stability is an utmost need nowadays, there 
are other aspects such as education and welfare that can solve poverty issues 
substantially. For example, in the past decades the government from Canada 
encouraged a housing 
p
roject in Colombia that included the construction of more 
than 1000 prefabricated houses. Thus, a huge amount of 
poor
people in Colombia 
benefited thanks to Canada´s authorities enjoying their houses for a long time period. 
In addition, important features of society like education has to be 
encouraged
for the 
sake and improvement of underdeveloped nations. An excellent example of this 
occurred
last year when a 
British
language company decided to 
develop
a project in 
further education and foreign language education in some countries of Africa such as 
Namibia and Gabon. Consequently, the rate of high quality education has grown 
successfully in these countries as well as their graduated and well-prepared students.