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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Friday, the restaurant earned 
its 
highest revenues 
on
the Friday night. On the other 
hand, the lowest turnovers were recorded during 
the 
weekend. 
In terms of the performance during weekdays, the sales during lunch time fluctuated 
slightly in the range of $2,375 to $2,500 per day.
A s
imilar stable pattern is also 
found during dinner time for the same period, which was varied between $3,445 and 
$3,850, except Friday, where it had the highest recorded sales of $4,350.
On the other hand, the restaurant had a much lesser business during 
the 
weekend, in 
which the sales for lunch 
were
around $1,550 to $1,950 per day, while the same for 
dinner was about $2,450 to $2,900. 
(181 words) 
Score: 5.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Covers the requirements of the task and presents a clear overview of main trends, 
differences or stages. 
Clearly presents and highlights key features/bullet points but could be more fully 
extended. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression. 
Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences 
may be faulty or mechanical. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. 
Uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation. 
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