Ielts sample essays collection

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Score: 6.5 
Comment [A17]: 
Good!
Comment [A18]: 
Should add NUMBERS!.
Comment [A19]: 
Should add NUMBERS!.

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use less common 
vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. Makes some errors in spelling and or word 
formation, but they do not impede communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. 
Candidate has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors. 
 
Example 2
The table illustrates how many sales were generated by a small restaurant, which 
was located in the central business area, during the lunch and dinner times of the 
week from 7 to 13 October (Monday to Sunday).
Overall, the restaurant had a higher overall profit during the weekdays than 
on the 
weekend. While the sales in the afternoon remain
ed
stable throughout Monday to