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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
All in all, it is evident that having kids at a later age may be more fruitful for both the 
parents and kids. Since, it allows them to meet their life objectives before entering the 
parenthood phase, they feel more confident to fulfill the needs of 
their 
family, for 
example, time or money. However, with the advancement of science, the biological 
issue can be taken care of, in most of the cases. Therefore, the odds of having a 
better family are higher with late family planning.
(346 words) 
Score: 8.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. 
Presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and 
supported ideas. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Sequences information and ideas logically. 
Manages all aspects of cohesion well. 
Uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a wide range of vocabulary fluently and flexibly to convey precise meanings. 
Skilfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in 
word choice and collocation. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
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Uses a variety of complex structures. 
Produces frequent error free sentences. 
Has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors.