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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
One of the most beneficial aspects adding to the support of this issue is that it let
s
people to live their life to their fullest potential before becoming parents. To put it 
more simply, the older you decide to have children
,
the more time you will have to 
educate yourself and find what makes you really a happy individual. This will result 
not only in a more fulfilling life and an inner satisfaction but will also create the 
foundations for a happy family. 
Continuing with the drawbacks, it would be an omission not to emphasize that the 
older somebody gets the most difficult is to have children. To put it more simply, 
scientific evidence suggests that the probability of having a child is getting smaller, 
specially after 
becoming 
40, and that is why many people seek medical advice when 
they are facing this problem. With the combination of high infertility rates in many 
countries, giving birth to a child after a certain age seems 
to be a 
really challenging 
issue. 
To conclude, the causes of this phenomenon are quite evident as they seem to 
appear all over us and in my opinion the benefits of creating a family in a later stage 
of your life outweigh the drawbacks. 
(398 words) 
Score: 8.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. The response is well developed with 
supported evidence and examples.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately. Presents a clear central topic to each 
paragraph.