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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
older parents are usually well educated and wealthy enough to offer their children 
a 
better start in their life. 
(326 words) 
Score: 7.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task. Presents a clear position throughout the response. 
Presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-
generalise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout. 
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately. Presents a clear central topic within 
each paragraph. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. 
Attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. 
Makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede 
communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error free sentences. 
Has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors. 
Example 3 

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Nowadays it seems to be a common trend that people decide to get children at a 
later age than in the past. But is this advantageous?
Previously woman mainly had two duties; give birth and raise children. They were 
wed at early ages and gave birth usually before 
becoming
sixteen years old. In those 
days it was very advantageous. People didn’t get that old and the chance 
that 
the 
child grew up healthy was small. So the more children you had the more they could 
provide for you later. However, all these things aren’t problems anymore in today’s 
society. People grow older, we have health care, pension
s
and children don’t die as 
often.
Right now people seem to be more focused on themselves and their career. This can 
be very advantageous since they are able to provide for their children so they e.g. are 
able to go to college. Furthermore it helps them define more who they are and what 
they want in life. I know people who 
had
children before they were 20 and the child 
seemed to get in the way of their own life sometimes. They still want to travel, see 
the world and meet new people, which is harder when you have a child both from
a
financial and practical aspect.
Nevertheless there are also disadvantages when people get children at an older age. 
The main problem is the health issues during birth. When woman reach a certain 
age their bodies are less capable of giving birth and the chance 
of
complications gets 
higher. 
In conclusion I think for our society nowadays it is more advantageous to 
have
children at a later age. Our society has changed a lot and people have laid the focus 
first with themselves.