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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
abnormality. Hence, there may be fewer advantages in late pregnancy than in early 
pregnancy. 
(255 words) 
Score: 6.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task. Presents a clear position throughout the response
and presents, extends and supports main ideas, There may be a tendency to 
overgeneralise and supporting ideas may lack focus. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use some less 
common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy with spelling and word choice. 
Spelling mistakes do not cause a problem with understanding. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex structures but with more errors on the complex 
structures. The mistakes in grammar don’t usually cause a problem with 
understanding. 
 
 

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Example 2 
Nowadays, people tend to decide to have their first child much later 
than a
few 
decades ago. This trend has 
divided
public's opinion into 
advocates
and detractors. 
Having children later on is a 
consequence
of 
a 
few factors. 
Firstly, these days an 
indispensable
role 
in
today's society 
is in 
education, which is 
time consuming and very often young students 
are unable to 
become parents due to 
being 
focused
on 
the acquisition
of new knowledge and 
gaining
professional 
qualifications. 
Secondly, after finishing 
u
niversity
,
the 
young generation 
would 
rather concentrate 
on 
their 
future career than on having progeny. 
Furthermore
, when they finally establish 
a 
strong social and financial position, they 
are becoming focused on creating 
a 
homely environment and introduce their babies 
to the world. However, sometimes it takes longer than expected due to new 
generation's diseases such us problem with fertility, that is often 
the consequence
of 
a 
stressful and unhealthy lifestyle caused by 
the 
rat race. 
Personally, I think that 
the advantages
outweigh
the 
disadvantages, because much 
more mature parents are taking greater care of their offspring, due to being more 
patient 
than
younger people. 
Moreover, educated parents are better role models and are able to pass their 
acquired
knowledge to their children. There was a 
research
, which 
showed
that the 
majority of teenagers who are entering 
u
niveristy, usually come from families whose 
members also 
have
a degree. 
Another point which supports my point of view is, that older parents, who 
have 
already established their 
financial
position can offer their offspring better prosperity. 
In other words, parents 
have
resources to contribute financially in their children's 
education, holidays and other additional after school activities, which can reflect in 
better physical and emotional development. 
In conclusion, 
the 
new generation seems to have their children later on 
than
before 
due to longer period
s
of education, better access to 
contraception
, fertility problems 
and 
a 
desire to establish 
a 
financial and social position in our society. I
n
my opinion,