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for our mind to rest in order to keep it strong and in good shape, and consequently,
we will have
a
better work performance in return.
Score: 6.5
Detail comments
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses the task only partially.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-
use. Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph.
(LR) Lexical Resource
Uses a sufficient range or vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision.
Uses less common lexical items and some awareness of style and collocation.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms.
Makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce
communication.
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Example 2
Some people think that we should use our leisure time
to do activities that can
revitalise our mind while others believe that it is essential to use our leisure time to
rest and recuperate our energy. In my personal opinion, I think it really depends on
the individual, whether they want to use the time to rest
or to participate in other
activities.
First of all, some people enjoy using their leisure time to do activities for self-
improvement, others, simply to build up their hobbies. For instance, I like to use my
free time to learn tennis. Learning a new skill allows me to improve on my flexibility,
keeps me fit and healthy. Similarly, there are people who prefer to do activities that
can improve their mind such
as reading or sign up
to
a course to gain new knowledge.
However, there are people who prefer to use their leisure time to rest their mind
s
and
bod
ies
in order to be ready for their next day of work. A good case in point is the job
of a teacher. During school hours, teachers are overloaded
with works such as
marking and teaching students. At the end of the day, most of them would be
exhausted. Therefore, it is understandable that they would want to use their free time
to rest.
Personally, I think many people like to use their leisure time to do things based on
their needs. For example, teachers might use most of their time to rest in order to be
ready for their work but during school
holidays or weekends, some of them would
want to step out of their comfort zone and try different activities instead of staying at
home. Likewise, I believe there are others who enjoy participating in activities during
their free time but certainly there are moments where they felt extremely tired or just
simply had a bad day at work. In this case, they might choose to stay home to rest
and restore their mind and soul.
In conclusion, I think many people like to use their leisure time to do things based on
their mood and their energy level. When one is feeling positive and happy,
one
might
want to go out and try new things and when one is feeling moody, perhaps staying
at home to relax and
unwind
would be a better option.
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