Ielts sample essays collection

IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
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good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors.
 
Example 4 
Two opposite viewpoints emerge when talking about kids’ relationships. On one side, 
it is argued that children should be given the possibility to compete. On the other, it is 
claimed that if children learn to help each other out, they will become better 
individuals in the future. This essay will try to come up with a synthesis, after passing 
through both these views. 
In the first place, I will take into consideration the former of the two aforementioned 
thesis. This idea is not totally agreeable. In fact, it is not a necessary condition that 
competitive environments create only useful and strong students, capable of facing 
whatever they need to. The reason is quite intuitive: a lot of children, though 
potentially gifted, are not able to keep up with a constant pressure. Therefore, as 
opposed to what some may state, a competitive and agonistic environment is likely to 
generate confusion, shyness and envy. However, we should not look at competition 
as a demon, since that it can have positive effects, such as self-awareness. 
Having said that, I will now take into account the second thesis. Helping and 
understanding each other are essential qualities for a young citizen living in a 
democratic country. A culture based on sympathy and compassion (meaning what 
the greek root of this word means, therefore “to suffer with others”) represents an 
achievable goal for western societies. A world in which none is left behind is a world 
which everybody wishes to live in. By the way, we should not suppose we are all 
equal: the innate differences that characterize each person’s abilities should not be 
seen as a threat to a pacific and cooperative society. 
In conclusion, I will propose a compromise, as 
I
claimed in the introduction. Help and 
cooperation should be praised and enhanced. However, a sane competition (where 
none is isolated because of his weaknesses) can be exploited as a tool for education.