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Detail comments
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task.
Presents a clear position throughout the response.
Presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-
generalise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-
use.
Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
(LR) Lexical Resource
Uses a wide range of vocabulary fluently and flexibly to convey precise meanings.
Skilfully uses uncommon lexical items.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Uses a wide range of structures.
The majority of sentences are error-free.
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---------- Question 3 ----------
You should spend about
40
minutes on this task.
Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that
improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.
Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.
You should write at least
250
words.
Example 1
According to some, leisure time ought to be used for the improvement of our
intelligence by engaging in activities such as reading and doing word puzzles, while
the others consider that the time should be spent on activities in order to relax our
mind. In my opinion, I agree with the latter as relaxation
is important for mental
health which in turn will improve our performance in daily work.
Given the stressful environment in
the
modern world, the leisure time is better to be
used for relaxing our mind and keeping them healthy. In the present, we face a lot of
stress and pressure during daily life, for example
a
heavy workload in
the
workplace
and high competition in
the
business environment. Such
high pressure makes our
mind
s
work
to
its limit and many people become burn
t
out as a result. Hence, during
the leisure time, if people can let their mind to have some rest (for instance doing
some exercises), some of the pressure can be relieved and vented so their well-being
can be maintained.
In addition, spending leisure time for rest is not only good for mental health but
it is
also able to improve our daily work performance. Some
researchers suggest that
when we relax ourselves by doing some exercises, our bodies release some
chemicals which will in turn make us happy and pleased.
Such necessary rest and
with
those chemicals make people
to
becom
e
more focus
ed
on their work and
enhanc
es
their performance in
a
stressful environment. For example, students will
perform better
in examination
s
if their mind
s
have enough rest beforehand.
In conclusion, despite someone believ
ing
that it is better to spend the
ir
leisure time
on mind improving activities, I think that instead, leisure time should be given priority
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