Ielts sample essays collection

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Comment [A28]: 
So what is YOUR
opinion? Don’t forget to give your
side if they ask for an opinion.

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task although some could be more fully covered. The 
position is relevant although slightly repetitive and sometimes unclear. Some areas 
may be undeveloped enough. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph.
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. Uses 
less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation. May 
produce some errors in word choice, spelling and word formation.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex structures but with more errors on the complex 
structures. The mistakes in grammar don’t usually cause a problem with 
understanding. 
 
Example 3 
In the 21st century the world has experienced rapid economic growth in most 
countries. Capitalism has taken over most economies of the world. However, with 
such growth fueled by capitalism, income inequalities have also proliferated. It is 
estimated that 85% of the wealth in the world is owned by 15% of its population. 
Such a dichotomy has varied schools of thought. 

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