Ielts sample essays collection

IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
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One
group of people believe that the high salaries earned by a small group of 
people is a natural outcome of their skills sets, qualifications and efforts put in. Such 
people act as a role model of the rest of the society. Government intervention to 
regulate income levels is hence, not necessary. 
Another school of thought suggests that 
a 
minority concentration of high income 
levels is leading to social unrest. It is increasing the inequality and disrupting the very 
fabric of the society. Such inequalities are leading to increased crime rates and 
making the difference between have and have nots, more and more apparent. Hence, 
they lobby for government intervention, in order to create a threshold for salary 
levels. 
Both schools of thought have valid reasoning to support their claims. However, in my 
opinion, government intervention in order to regulate income levels can have an 
adverse impact. Instead, government
s
should look at taxing the rich appropriately. By 
regulating the salaries to a certain level, the government may create a disincentive for 
people who deserve success and reap benefits of their own hard work. Taxing them 
appropriately can ensure greater revenues for the government which in
turn can be 
spent for the upliftment of the weaker sections of the society. 
(268 words) 
Score: 7.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, supported and 
extended ideas. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Uses a range of cohesive devices well, although there are places of under-use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
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