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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
The Tokyo subway system has the highest number of passengers around 1927 
million per year . Also the Paris subway system comes next the highest the number 
of passengers approximately 1191 million each year. While the Kyoto system has the 
lowest number of passengers each year that around 45 million. 
(169 words) 
Score: 6.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Candidate arranges information and ideas coherently, and there is a clear overall 
progression. Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and between 
sentences may be faulty or mechanical. May not always use referencing clearly or 
appropriately when beginning paragraphs. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use less common 
vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. Makes some errors in spelling and or word 
formation, but they do not impede communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. Makes some errors in grammar 
and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication.

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