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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
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The countries that this research group travelled to, can be 
divided
into three regions, 
namely Western Europe, North America and other areas. Out of all these three 
destinations, Western Europe was the most favourable place by a 
large 
margin. 
Coming into 1994, just below 20,000 citizens visited there, while only around 1000 
went to North America. Similar to the table, there was also a minor drop for Western 
Europe visitors in 1995. Afterwards, the population of travellers rose up to the 
maximum over the next three years, jumping up to just below 25,000 in 1998. 
Comparing to the other two regions, the growth and the overall population of visitors 
to
Western Europe was far more significant. 
(212 words)
 
Score: 6.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places. 
Recounts detail mechanically with no clear overview. 
Presents, but inadequately covers, key features/bullet points; there may be a 
tendency to focus on details. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression. 
Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences 
may be faulty or mechanical. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. 
Attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. 
Makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede