Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
In conclusion, I believe that the 
prevalence
of nuclear families and changing roles of 
male
s
and female
s
in 
the
home are rather positive changes because these allow 
people to go after jobs 
that 
they 
are 
good at and also they love. 
(308 words) 
Score: 6.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than 
others. 
Presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or 
repetitive.
Presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression. 
Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences 
may be faulty or mechanical. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range or vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. 
Uses less common lexical items and some awareness of style and collocation. 
May produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
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