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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
Furthermore, an increase in cars also brings with it the smog of smoke, horribly 
polluting the fresh air. This can have detrimental effects on the health of pedestrians, 
with many people suffering from asthma and problems with vision. As an increased 
amount of people need a place to stay, a huge increase in competition is seen in 
housing, greatly driving up rent and house prices. As a result, the overall cost of living 
in large cities is often significantly higher than regional towns, resulting in many 
people struggling to make ends meet. 
I believe governments should encourage life in regional towns. People often move to 
big cities for employment, education and increased social activities. These 
investments should be made in regional zones. If smaller towns had the employment, 
education and transport opportunities similar to those found in urban cities, people 
would not need or want to relocate as these towns would cater to their requirements. 
Moreover, these investments would also ease the troubles of the metropolitan areas. 
With their population decreasing, some of the troubles of everyday life could be 
reduced significantly. 
(319 words) 
Score: 8.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. The response is well developed with 
supported evidence and examples. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas.
There is clear progression throughout. Uses a range of cohesive devices 
appropriately although there may be some under use.
Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph. 

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