Ielts sample essays collection

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(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. The response is well developed with 
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supported evidence and examples. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Sequences information and ideas logically. Manages all aspects of cohesion well. 
Uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a range of vocabulary, fluently and flexibly. There is some skilful use of some 
uncommon words although there are some errors. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. Has 
good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors. 
 
Example 4 
As globalization increases along with the population boom, life in large cities has 
become increasingly challenging. All aspects of life are affected by the huge amount 
of people residing in metropolitan areas. People are often faced with crippling traffic, 
horrible air pollution, over-inflated housing amongst many other problems. In my 
opinion, to ease the burden on overpopulated urban cities
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life in regional towns 
should be encouraged by governments. 
Big cities are often appealing for their extravagant social scene and thriving 
employment opportunities. While many migrate there, soon an overpopulation 
problem 
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merges resulting in a vast array of problems. Firstly, as the large numbers 
of vehicles increase, the roads soon come to a halt, with traffic locking the city down. 
This makes commuting increasingly difficult, as long hours of the day are spent 
traveling to and from destinations.