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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
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way to obesity. One of the causes of this 
illness
is 
the lack
of 
exercise
and 
a 
virtual 
life does not encourage 
physical
activity. 
To sum up, computers are very important to 
a 
modern lifestyle, and like all things 
the 
use of computers has advantages and disadvantages, but I believe that computers 
should be introduced into classrooms, and 
their
programs should be used for direct 
teaching. 
(256 words) 
Score: 6.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than 
others. 
Presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or 
repetitive.
Presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout. 
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately. 
Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph.