Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
{musician}, Madonna 
are 
also musician
s who are 
are involved in a lot of charity 
organization
s
to improve the lives of children in various places. 
Furthermore, l feel 
the 
nursing profession needs to fall under the highly paid jobs too. 
The job requires a lot of empathy, dedication and passion. Most patients undergo a 
series of emotional stress during the course of their illness. They become aggressive, 
isolated and require a lot of ongoing support. The most people they spend time with 
throughout their admission is nurses
, more
than anyone else in the hospital. 
In conclusion, the essays gives my views on 
whether
entertainers are overpaid or not, 
as well as the job l feel need
s
to be
in the 
well paid bracket
. (353 words)
Score: 6.0
 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
 
Addresses all parts of the task although some could be more fully covered. The 
position is relevant although slightly repetitive and sometimes unclear. Some areas 
may be undeveloped enough. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged clearly and there is clear overall progression. Paragraphs are 
relatively easy to understand and generally have a clear central topic although they 
may not be logical sometimes. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use some less 
common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy with spelling and word choice. 
Spelling mistakes do not cause a problem with understanding.