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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
wealth to the disadvantage of other countries. The time before the First World War 
has shown is that instead of raising the budget for military expenditure, countries 
should have put more effort on the improvement of their educational and social 
systems. 
However, people have to look forward to overcom
ing
problems that their ancestors 
have not faced. For example, in the 19
th
century when unemployment rates surged, 
countries closed off their markets by imposing higher trade tariffs on goods. In a 
globalized world, economies and companies are linked with others, and thus, an 
isolation policy is not an appropriate scheme to solve economic problems. Moreover, 
some problems have not been faced by our predecessors. Artificial Intelligence will 
be able to mimic human learning, and thus, can replace 
the 
human workforce at a 
higher speed than stem machine
s
could do. 
However, the economic and political problems of different centuries follow
s
similar 
patterns. In order to prevent politicians and business leaders from making the same 
mistakes, the study of history is important. Yet, facing new problems, we have to 
develop new ideas. 
(282 words) 
Score: 8.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. The response is well developed with 
supported evidence and examples.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph.