Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
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Uses a mix of simple and complex structures but with more errors on the complex 
structures. The mistakes in grammar don’t usually cause a problem with 
understanding. 
 
Example 2 
Film stars, sports figures and pop musicians are believed to be paid an amount of 
money that the do not deserve. However, I do not think that this statement is 
necessarily true, as I think they are paid fairly.
As common people, it is impossible to realize the hard work that comes with being a 
public figure. It is not only exhausting in the sense that they work constantly, by 
recording albums, practicing for competitions and acting in front of cameras over and 
over
,
but it is also tiring considering that 
they 
barely have a private life. Anything they 
do is public, even if they do not agree to show the world certain parts of their lives. 
This constant reminder that everything they do has an impact to people might cause 
several problems, such as depression and anxiety, without even noticing. Although 
money is not the solution to these problems, it is in a sense a way of recognition for 
them. And they also can invest it on mental health programs.
On the other hand, it is believed that they are paid too much because, in the eyes of 
some people, they do not do something useful as it is just entertainment. Having fun 
is an act that is very underrated nowadays, to a point in which people might see it as 
bad. However, people need and deserve to be distracted by things they like. As 
recording an album or participating in a film is a serious job, the only way of 
supporting the artists or sports 
stars
you like is paying for their product. That being 
said, individuals only give a small portion of their money, which is added to every 
other individual that paid for that product, resulting in the amount of money people 
criticize. 
To sum up, I do think entertainers are paid a big amount of money, but I do not agree 
with the claim that they do not deserve it. 
Just
because they are millionaires
doesn’t
mean that they spend all their money buying useless products. Many artists are 
aware of how divided the world is in terms of money, so they usually become 
activists to try to fix this, which ends up with them investing their own money in