Ielts sample essays collection

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attract an increasing number of Chinese who are eager to have a good grasp of 
western culture
and will
pay 
high 
entrance fees. Moreover, souvenirs associated with 
these collections may also be popular in the retailers. In these ways, national tourism 
can be promoted economically. 
In conclusion, paying more attention to local collections is beneficial to cultural 
identity, while exhibits from other places can create more revenue for local tourism.
(270 words) 
Score: 7.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task. Presents a clear position throughout the response
and presents, extends and supports main ideas, There may be a tendency to 
overgeneralise and supporting ideas may lack focus.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph.
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a wide range of vocabulary, fluently and flexibly. There is skilful use of some 
uncommon words although there are some occasional errors.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. Has 
good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors. 
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