Cayman Islands Writing Exemplar

AF4: 

Organisation 

– Construct paragraphs and use cohesion within and between paragraphs

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The author uses simple, generic linking words (e.g., “after that,” “in the end”) to signal the passage of time and  

organise events effectively. 

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The author effectively uses return sweep to organise his/her sentences and appears to group each event and the 

closing. 

AF5: 

Sentence Fluency

 – Vary sentences for clarity, purpose, and effect

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The author writes his/her thoughts in short yet full sentences and is starting to begin sentences in a variety of 

ways (e.g., “I played…,” “I plated…,” “My mom …”). 

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Most of the text is written in the simple past tense. 

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“And” is used as a connective to join two events (e.g., “I got up and watched T.V.”); however, the author does not 

yet use “and” as a connective to join two independent clauses to make a compound sentence.

Saturday

In the beginning I got up 

and wocht tv. After that I played 

with my pretty dola. I plat her 

here. Then my mom came 

home.

In The end my mom heleped 

me with my homewrok. 

I liked this day! The end. 

Interpretation: 

In the beginning I got up 

and watched T.V. After that I played

with my pretty dolly. I platted her 

hair. Then my mom came 

home. 

In the end my mom helped 

me with my homework. 

I liked this day! The end.  

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