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3) Body paragraph 1
First of all, grapes are harvested from the vineyard either by workers or
by special machinery. Following this step, the gathered crop is put in
containers. Next, grapes are washed, and leaves and stems are removed
from vines by hand before the grapes are crushed by a presser to
produce grape juice.
(Sequencing words are well-practiced, showing the order of the steps plus
adding cohesion to the writing. Passive voice is appropriately used.)
4) Body paragraph 2
At this point, yeast is added to the grape juice so that it is fermented. The
juice is poured in barrels, which are made of oak wood to complete the
process of fermentation. The resulting liquid is then left in barrels for
two months to be completely fermented. When the wine is ready, it is
poured into bottles, which are labeled before being shipped to the
storage unit by trucks.
(Two non-defining relative clauses have used the provided information in the
diagram helping with cohesion and meeting the word limit requirement;
passive voice and sequencing vocabulary are highlighted throughout the
paragraph. There is no personal information, judgment, or analysis.)
Sample writing
The diagram illustrates how wine is made in a small-scale winery.
Overall, a few steps and some automated machines are involved in wine
production, starting with harvesting grapes and ending with transporting wine
bottles to the warehouse.
First of all, grapes are harvested from the vineyard either by workers or by
special machinery. Following this step, the gathered crop is put in containers.
Next, grapes are washed, and leaves and stems are removed from vines by
hand before the grapes are crushed by a presser to produce grape juice.

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At this point, yeast is added to the grape juice so that it is fermented. The
juice is poured in barrels, which are made of oak wood to complete the
process of fermentation. The resulting liquid is then left in barrels for two
months to be completely fermented. When the wine is ready, it is poured into
bottles, which are labeled before being shipped to the storage unit by trucks.
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