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SAMPLE 23
Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better
prepared with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by
wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have different views on whether children from wealthy (families) or low –
income families would cope better with life challenges. While I understand that a
materially abundant life may offer some advantages, I would argue that being
brought up in poverty-stricken families is usually more beneficial. Very well-
written!
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why some people advocate
nurturing children in comfortable environments. One of the essential elements is
that children in wealthy families are undoubtedly provided with better living
conditions and learning materials. With the widely available (re)sources of
information, these children are likely to achieve better academic achievements
than their poorer peers. In addition, children who have prosperous parents often
obtain good-quality childminding and after-school childcare; hence, they are
allowed to focus completely on their studies and enjoy other extra-curriculum
activities.
On the other hand, I believe that being brought up in families which are lack of
financial resources would better prepare children for their future. Firstly, junior
members in impoverished families are usually educated about the value of money
in their formative years, as well as learning how to support their parents in
earning money. Therefore, they could engage in diverse activities and be equipped
with various life/soft skills that may be extremely useful in their adult lives, such
as communication (skills) or problem-solving skills. Secondly, if children are
given the chance to interact with the reality from their early stages in life, they
could develop strong personalities to overcome adversity in their adulthood, and
thus/thereby coping better with the competitive world. For example, a child that
grew up in a working-class family and since my childhood I have been cultivating/
cultivated valuable virtues of life like responsibility, endurance, and diligence,
which helps me a great deal in leading my adult life.
In conclusion, while it is true that children growing up in wealthy families benefit
in some ways, this is by no means that they can be better prepared for life’s
challenges than children whose childhood suffers from poverty.
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