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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
for example. Naturally, drug users may have difficulty processing and retaining 
information. In this case, this means poor results at school. More importantly, drug 
abuse has been correlated to the appearance of some psychological diseases, such 
as bipolarism and borderline syndrome. I, for instance, have seen this happen to two 
friends of mine who, because of drug abuse, have seen their life significantly impaired. 
To conclude, drug abuse is a problem that many times starts at home with parents 
and other role models setting a bad example. This means teenagers do not look at 
drug consumption seriously and they do not think how drugs might limit or destroy 
their life, mainly as a student. I believe that to fight this issue, we must invest in 
education. It is vital to instill critical thinking at an 
early
age, to help young minds to 
look at their surroundings and identify what is a good example and what is not. 
Another solution might be to spread stories of 
combating
drug abuse by celebrities, 
for example. I believe this could inspire teenagers to pay attention to this issue. In 
short, education and stories by positive young models might be a good solution. 
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Score: 7.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. 
Presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended 
and supported ideas. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Sequences information and ideas logically. 
Manages all aspects of cohesion well. 
Uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately.