Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
To conclude, sometimes this crime rate that increases could be passively caused by 
everyone. 
For
example, somebody who did not help a friend when they had a 
problem. If everyone would be more human
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to the
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surrounding
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, the crime rate 
could decrease.
(267 words) 
Score: 6.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than 
others. 
Presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or 
repetitive.
Presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression. 
Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences 
may be faulty or mechanical. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. 
Attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. 
Makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede 
communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
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Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. 
Makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce 
communication.