Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
In conclusion, problems such as pollution and the elimination of green areas are 
causing the transfer of thousands of people from large cities. However, the 
government
,
instead of encouraging them to run away, should find immediate 
solutions.
(262 words) 
Score: 7.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task. Presents a clear position throughout the response
and presents, extends and supports main ideas, There may be a tendency to 
overgeneralise and supporting ideas may lack focus. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph.
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. Uses 
less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation. May 
produce some errors in word choice, spelling and word formation. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. Has 
good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors.
 
 
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