Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
In conclusion, 
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uman beings are causing the alteration of global temperature
s
by 
overusing vehicles and domestic electricity. However, we are able to solve this 
problem by taking advantage of public transportation and by referring to how people 
organised their chores many years ago when the power of electricity was not so 
commonly used. 
(351 words) 
Score: 7.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task. 
Presents a clear position throughout the response. 
Presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-
generalise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout. 
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-
use. 
Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range or vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. 
Uses less common lexical items and some awareness of style and collocation. 
May produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation.