Cayman Islands Writing Exemplar

Assessment Commentary:

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AF3: 

Organisation

 – Organise and present whole texts effectively, sequencing and structuring

information, ideas and events

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The piece has a short opening that states the author’s opinion (e.g., “I want a pet…”). 

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There is no evidence of a closing statement that re-states the author’s opinion.

AF4: 

Organisation

 – Construct paragraphs and use cohesion within and between paragraphs

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The author does not use any generic linking words within the piece. 

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The author attempts to uses independent sentences, written in a logical order. 

AF5: 

Sentence Fluency

 – Vary sentences for clarity, purpose, and effect

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The author attempts to use sentences although his/her ideas run into one another. New ideas generally 

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begin with “I” (e.g., “I behave”).

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The author mixes past and present tenses (e.g., “did good” is in the past tense, while “behave” is in the present).

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The word “and” is used multiple times by the author, but he/she does not use “and” to connect ideas. Instead, 

“and” is used to mark what would be the next sentence.