50 Successful Ivy League Application Essays


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part of my life, I have filled the vacancy in my heart with other chal-
lenging and significant activities that I have grown to love with the 
same fervor. That picture, though simple, encompasses the passion that 
is my life. It will forever symbolize for me the love and dedication I 
have for everything I do.
With a last glance, I hang the heavy frame on the wall. The box 
is empty, unlike the room. Although the room is only filled by a few 
items, it is occupied by the only items I will ever need for the rest of my 
life: friendship, humility, self-expression, family, god, and passion.
AnAlysis
The framework for this essay provides a way to tie together a num-
ber of things that are important to Laura. She covers five different sets 
of objects; and through each of these, she reveals a part of herself.
What makes this essay especially effective is that Laura works her 
thoughts into the descriptions of the items. For example, she writes, “I 
begin to place them, one by one, onto my familiar, yet strangely new 
shelf.” By describing the shelf as “strangely new,” she reflects her ap-
prehension about having her possessions in a new setting.
Through Mr. Teddy we learn that Laura has moved many times. 
Relocating is always difficult and requires acclimating to new sur-
roundings, choosing different friends, and perhaps even adjusting to 
an unfamiliar culture. The admissions officers can conclude that Laura 
is probably someone who is flexible in new situations, adept at making 
friends, and willing to establish roots.
Laura shows her sentimentality when describing the lamp. We 
can imagine that at one point, all the settings worked. Her description 
makes us wonder for what adventures the lamp has provided light as 
Laura worked to see her way through them.
As someone who keeps a journal, Laura shows that she is self 
reflective. She is a person who is introspective and has a sense of 
humor, mentioning Woody Allen. These are qualities that probably 
piqued the interest of the admissions officers. They like to see students 


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who can take a step back to reflect on their actions and who can laugh 
about life.
Through the Rosary and Bible, Laura shows her connection to reli-
gion and her family. We learn about her family ties to Colombia.
The heart of the essay is the soccer photo. Through the photo, she 
introduces her background with the sport and how an injury stopped 
her from playing. But she also reveals that when she did play, she 
played hard and was good at it. Laura then shares that other activities 
have filled the void of soccer. What makes this part of the essay work 
is that she shares her feelings in an unguarded and honest way.
The flow of Laura’s writing is just right. She covers many aspects 
of herself and highlights her values by providing enough detail in her 
description of each item that it emphasizes its meaning.
Through this essay, the admissions officers learned a lot about 
Laura—that she has made many transitions throughout her life, she is 
sentimental about her past, she is introspective, she has strong con-
nections to her family and religion, and she is a person who commits 
herself with passion. As you are writing your essay, keep in mind that 
you have a similar goal—to reveal something about yourself or your 
values to the admissions officers. They want to know what makes you 
the person who you are.



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